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Come a little closer; let me whisper in your ear
Let me tell you something you were never meant to hear
Never tell another, never let the truth appear
Never let them find the things so close, so real, so near

Statements made of venom slip away from poisoned lips
Reaching for the power, feel it touch your fingertips
Watching as the thread I hang my very life on rips
Every thought of laughter causes my heart to eclipse

Come a little closer and look down upon my skin
See the person everybody wished I could have been
Feel the endless torture that poured out from deep within
Taste the air around you, drenched in every broken sin

Listen to my screams, oh, listen closely to my cries
Search for every nightmare lying down upon the skies
Treasure with your very soul the truth behind my eyes
And cradle your existence with the blood of my goodbyes…
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No. I ain't a cutter, I just write to sound... depressed. O.o
HI! I wish I could've thought of a better ending, but... i couldn't... so y'all are stuck with this.

Comments please! 8D

~ Mikki
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:icondarknessunderthemoon:
Hey, it's alright. :heart: I always write sad poems or story's, I seem to never write something good. -.- It's so very sad sometimes. So I understand your pain. lol

~Elli
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
First off, THANKS SO MUCH FOR THE WATCH AND FAVE :D
Second, ahaha, I stink when it comes to happiness. xD

~ Mikki
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Your more then welcome. :heart: I really love your poems so I couldn't hold back from watching! :hug: And yesh, I understand! I suck at anything happy. -.- Everytime I sit down to try to write, I end up writing something sad.....>.< Like I black out and the next thing I know, I'm like 'REALLY?!' Then I gets all sad. lol
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
XD
Same here. I tried writing a love poem once... and it ended up as a suicide/domestic abuse poem. xD

~ Mikki
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:icondarknessunderthemoon:
*laughs* I'm sorry my dear. :squee: I tried to write a happy couple story and it ended with her dying and going back to see him crying....it wasn't what I wanted but my brain wanted me to write something else. lol
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kitty-made-of-shadow Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
:D I'm AMAZED!!! Its so deep and beautiful yet it's terribly painful!
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!! :)

~ Mikki
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lark8v Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Loved it
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!!! It means a ton. :)

~ Mikki
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rothus66 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Really great poem and I thought the ending fit well with the rest.
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. ^.^
I thought it FIT fine, but I thought I could've worded it better or something.
~ Mikki
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135711cal Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012
It is very good, I love your sense of rhythm. and words often cut deeper than a knife can, "hacking chopping life's red roses from a heart pierced through and through."

It is a little awkward in line 7 and 8 but not badly so, (This often happens when you are keeping both rhythm and rhyme. I have seen worse in some "important works" by famous names)

It is very complex but It doesn't feel that way.
beautiful :)
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, thank you! :D
Line 7 does feel a little awkward, but I almost LIKE it, in a twisted way. It feels different, and I kinda like it. :)

Thank you so much!

~ Mikki
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BellaBugia Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I absolutely love this! I think your ending is perfect, so don't worry about that. Very well done =)
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank youuuuuuuuuu. ^.^ It feels a little too straightforward I guess. O.o

~ Mikki
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Axlazu Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful.

Seriously, I'm out of things to say besides that....everything I seem to read from you is beautiful.

Which is great, I have too many people on my watchlist that get a few good poems and then everything else seems to go downhill. Too many of my own are like that....your's though, always top notch ^^
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! You have NO IDEA how much that means to me, seriously. :tighthug:
And I've gotta thank you for all your comments, they're always so nice. ^.^

~ Mikki
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Axlazu Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
comments that even tell someone that their work is great or that you even took the time to read them are always nice ^^ So I try to do them frequently.
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yay! :D I love comments... They're pretty much the main reason I'm on this site. I want people to recognize my awesomeness. xD Kidding, kidding, but... yeah, I love comments. :)

~ Mikki
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TearsOfTheAmaranth Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very beautifuly written :clap:
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank ya very much! :D

~ Mikki
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MqvzaAndGx Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow! Thi sis like OMG great! I really love it! It should seriously be made into song lyrics. Go find someone who plays different instruments and start a band. Right now!
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ahaha, wow, thanks! xD That was an awesome comment, gotta say. :B
I should post some of my actual song lyrics up... although they suck... xD
Ehehe, thank you. ^.^

~ Mikki
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MqvzaAndGx Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very, very welcome darling! And you totally should post your lyrics! I've watched you if you decided to post them one day :hug:
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
O: Thank you thank you thank youuuuu!!! :D :D :D

~ Mikki
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MqvzaAndGx Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:tighthug:
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singingmalaak Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
very beautiful love the rhymes!
and yeah there is a rhythm some sort of beat! love it!
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much!!! ^.^

~ Mikki
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TweetSnape Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is beautifully written, i like it :D
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank youuuuuuu!!! :D

~ Mikki
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TheParanoidInsomniac Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully written
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InconsequentialPoet Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :)

~ Mikki
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